Needed some outdoors today, so I went for a long bike ride. It was warm, but very windy. This haiku came to me.
Trees are not waving
Goodbye in the summer wind —
They are just waving.
Personification in haiku is a definite no-no, as the point is to depict what happens unadorned. That way, the reader is able to have the same experience the writer did, rather than just be told what the experience was. So pointing out the absence of personification in one's own haiku is probably a sneaky trick that's just as bad, when it comes down to it. I like it, though.
2 comments:
I like it too. :)
haha!
Baiku happens to be how you'd spell Bike in Japanese (with Roman letters).
but you knew that too! that makes it a three-way pum!
Post a Comment